a new film project: omvendelsen

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the story thus far...

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the main character is named magdalena [can anyone tell me good nicknames/diminutives for this name] and she is a young adult, starting her life working at accounts payable. she has a friend from her college days whom she regularly converses and socialises with: natalya, who is very intellectual and very much "of the mind."

magdalena also has a brother named theophan who is spiritually minded (involved in the CHURCH as laity). he loves her and she is at odds with him for what he represents. she has had issues with her and she left her.

one night, natalya and magdalena decide to go to a dance club in the city. there magdalena meets vladimir, a mysterious guy who turns out to be a underworld master of sorts (trafficking, black market deals, etc.). he lives a very hedonistic and materialistic lifestyle: the pursuit of pleasure is a goal worth pursuing always in his mind. they begin a relationship where magdalena uses it to experience completeness and faux transcendence.

vladimir ends up dead during a business transaction and this destroys magdalena psychologically and emotionally. her way of dealing with it is to be more chemically dependent and more promiscious for the sake of "keeping the high." this sends her into a downward spiral, alienating her from natalya and nearly killing her... if it weren't for theophan helping her at the instance of natalya.

theophan helps magdalena recover physically and later in everything else. their conversations leads magdalena to reconcile herself with the CHURCH, theophan, natalya and more important uses that reconciliation to begin the long road of repentance for the sake of the kingdom.

that's basically the story. the screenplay and logistics will be worked on and has been worked on for some time.

any feedback or suggestions are appreciated and welcomed.

with love, fedya (derek power)

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The script

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Well it is a very classical script... So the actor will have to be performant... Do you plan "sex scenes" or scenes with French kiss?

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Re: The script

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Jean-Serge wrote:

Well it is a very classical script... So the actor will have to be performant... Do you plan "sex scenes" or scenes with French kiss?

unfortunately, to make the point (since i do envision this as a morality tale), i may do something like that... but if i can find a way to do it without resorting to that, then i'll take it.

more will be discussed on this later (and any opinion on it is appreciated)

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a question

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i need diminutives/nicknames for the following names (and also a verification that there can be a russian form of them):

magdalena
natalya
theophan
vladimir.

thank you,

fedya (derek power)

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Orthodox6 wrote:

You will not like the rest of what I shall write.

Just to provide some "Jane Q. Public" feedback, though. . . I would not go see a film such as you have proposed. Nor would I encourage anyone else to see it. The soul is affected powerfully by visual images, and your film promises to include indecencies. Yes, you intend them as "didactic" toward some eventual repentance of the characters. But I would do wrong to watch such things. Consider also that no Orthodox Christian in his or her right mind could act such scenes.

first off, theophan will be the only orthodox actor.

second off, pomiluy mya. and i'm starting to scrap the whole idea altogether because i feel sinful and lethal and treacherous and disgusting... and i've only written a rough outline and four pages of a draft. if you want to chastize me for conjuring up such monstrosity, so be it. if my fate is in gehenna, then that is truly what my heart desires.

and lastly... this is the first scene that i wrote...

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INT. THEOPHAN'S APARTMENT - DAY

Magdalena at this point is fully recovered from her overdose
and she's starting to go on the mend.  She's sitting down with
a cup of tea, lost in thought.  Theophan comes into the room
and sees her.

                THEOPHAN
Hey there.

Magdalena gets off her lost train thought and acknowledges
him in a half gaze.

                MAGDALENA
           (quietly)
      Hey.

Theophan looks around somewhat nervously but he is focused
based on his desire to help out Magdalena in any way he can.

                THEOPHAN
      Well... I'm glad that you found
      something to help you out there.

Magdalena acknowledges with a nod and starts to see the
genuineness of his actions.

                THEOPHAN (CONT'D)
      Well... just let me know if there's
      anything at all that I can do for you.

Magdalena at this point is overwhelmed by all of this
generosity.  She struggles to find the words that reflect
the melting of her heart.

                MAGDALENA
      I... don't know what to say exactly.

She pauses as Theophan looks at her with a genuine love.

                MAGDALENA (CONT'D)
           (breathes in, generously)
      Thank you.

                THEOPHAN
      Not a problem really.  I'm here for you.

Magdalena looks at him and starts to cry.  Theophan empathizes
and goes closer to her to console her.  Magdalena brushes off
his advances and breaks down into tears.  As she collapses on
the couch, she hugs a pillow close to her and Theophan
approaches her to console her.  She acknowledges and holds
his hand as she continues crying.

===

pomiluy mya, BOZHE, pomiluy mya

p.s. i'm not looking for "there, there, everything's ok" either.

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i now finished with the first draft of omvendelsen

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when announced back in 21.11.2005 i was done with the "first draft," it has been changed and is now referred to as the "rough draft."

today i've finished the "first draft v1," which is an extensive editing/slight rewrite by me (with a few suggestions from a few friends of mine).

btw, i don't hold anything against anyone for what your opinions may be on what i'm trying to do.

GOSPODI IUSE HRISTE, SINY BOZHIY, pomiluy mya greshnago

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